this is just so totally original, and just plain amazing.
Seriously
I couldnt find a thing wrong with it,
and i am very good at that. ;)
well done!!

This is so good... no, actually its great!! I also couldnt find anything wrong with it. Great job. Keep writing :) this is amazing.

Well I must say I didn't totally understand the part about the smell of his burnt flesh. I don't understand how that has to do with the rest. But maybe i'm not supposed to understand, if its meant to be personal or whatever. I liked this poem too. From the poems you've written i've read so far, seems like your style in writing doesn't vary very much. Why don't you try a poem that doesn't rhyme and is totally different from the poems you've written so far. That might make them more interesting, but it's just a suggestion. Keep writing, take care.
Satuxxa

I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think you have an amazing talent. I truely do :)

haha another robert :)

well done mate nice poem

Loved it . Great write. >3jess

Ok I want lessions!!! You write story poetry so well

Another amazing poem. You are a great writer! ^^ 5/5
~Steff

Good work on this one! I enjoyed reading it :) I like the way you rhyme some lines! good job! 5/5!

This one was really moving, a sad poem of abuse. Another great write by you, I really liked the word choice, it was again brillant, and the emtions were clear strong, and everso powerful. Keep up the good work. 5/5 I am sorry it took me so long to start commenting the ones you asked for, I have been nusy with work. Thanks for all the comments.