Surrounding

by Jacklyn   Apr 21, 2005


Surrounded by the streets,
Surrounded by no money,
A 16-year-old mom,
Living in a trailer park,
With low income at hand,
Life struggles, but they live,
A kid filled with determination and a plan,
Studies hard so the world can see,
Even underdogs can be a world champ.

Surrounded by wealth,
Surrounded by money,
Two parents in his hand,
They slip though his fingers just like sand,
With four vacation homes,
Each 5 million or more,
They are set for life,
The cash comes in every left and right,
So why try hard in life?
When we can party all day and all night?

Surrounded by the streets,
Surrounded by no money,
A 16-year-old mom,
With hardly any income at all,
Always putting her child down,
About how life’s a living Hell,
About how no matter how hard he tries,
He’s going to fail in his life.

Surrounded by wealth,
Surrounded by no money,
Two parents in his hand,
Who wants the best for him,
Four vacation homes,
Each five million or more,
But they warn him in his life’s plan,
He has to make it in the world himself,
He needs to build a business,
Because he needs to be the best,

~it's for an English paper, about what affects a kid more their parents or their environment? no mean to offend any one!

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  • 19 years ago

    by †JustAri†

    Hmmm, this is a very good topic to write about...makes u think really hard about what affects children...
    Well, I think that both environment and the parents affect the child simply bcuz of one word: influence. It's all what the child is used to in their lives, i suppose. Maybe if they grew up in an abusive home, they might be more withdrawn. Maybe if they grew up in a happy home they might be...well, happier, more outgoing. U C where I'm gettin at? But very interesting topic, i gotta say! Thank you for the comment on Quiet Solitude. I'm somewhat better, nothin to worry about, I'm still tryin to give myself time these days, u know to just cry about everything. Then i stop. :) Well, i gotta go! i'll type ya l8r! Peace Luv Happiness lil slam, //ari\\

  • 19 years ago

    by ElegantlyWasted

    Parents to some degree affect the child. In my case, i can say, yes, my parents have affected me. For life.

    Well done, i hope you are getting good marks in english :D With all these papers.

    ;;Loving you-
    Kalah.

  • 19 years ago

    by Roni

    WOW, great poem. I have to agree with every one above. its a 5!!

  • 19 years ago

    by katie!

    Well done, A good point made in this poem, I agree with the above, I believe the parents affect the child more but I may be wrong, Keep writing well done

  • 19 years ago

    by Heather M Craig

    I think the parents affect the kid more from my experiences.....so opinions are never offensive =) 5/5

    <3 Heather M Craig

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