Another interesting subect matter from you. Blimey you know how to keep someone interested. The only thing (and it is so minor I am almost loath to mention) that I didn't feel fitted was the 'impaled by salt' I loved the image 'impaled by' conjured but couldn't get my head around salt! A minor thing I know and like I said another excellent piece by you. I am away for the weekend but will definitely have a good look thru your poems when i get back and suggest which in my opinion are the strongest to help with the book. Congratulations with that and good luck. Love Rach xx

wow this is so awsome i could see the whole thing inside my head while reading its a bit eerie but really good your so talented!
>>5/5<<
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Also very cool.. Ok this be the last time cause you got so many for me to look at.....Proof read.... Mostly typing airs.

Wow, that's completely different from anything I've been reading. I loved it. Great work. >3jess

Excellent write, very well done...
5/5, Take Care, Always Believe in Love, Amit.

Interesting poem, completely different than anything I have read, and I still loved it,very cool :D, it kept me interested! Excellent poem :D :D 5/5

Wow
well I would break this poem up just a tad because it kind of hurts my eyes
I liked how you closed it because it was a powerful ending
I thought the message was good overall
and I give this poem a 5
good job

Oh!..wow!greatly written...very dark and the ending added to the beauty of this 1..and ecellent message conveyed in an interesting manner..kp it up!
xxPoojaxx