Wow-nice first poem!
if this is from experiance I hope your not hurting too much...
Please read my poems.. I've only just started writing too.. I'll look out for yours again.

Love Katie

Thankyou for the wonderful comments. They inspire me to keep writing. I'll look for your work now. Thanks again. Luv Gem xx

Good Job, I would change the title tho, Because it is already a song.

i guess im not the only one who feels this way apparently you do to great job! 5!

Hey girl i give you a 5 keep on writtin gyou know i love your poems..... my friend michelle says if it was possible she would give you a 10... keep them comming

love allaway your girl ~nova~
and `michelle`

I love the style of your poems. This one especially. Very nice. =]

From the ground which emotion has overflowed my heart
i say 2 u it was true love that forced u's apart... true love iz pure love from both sides, connected with an unbreakable force. And without both sides loving each other, its only one person stuck in a fools love.... for 1 of ur 1st poems this one iz excellent
peace 5/5
Anthony

That's a really good poem for your first. Amazing write, 5/5
Much love, Emma xox

Hey firstly can i just say thank u soo much for all ur comments on my poems - u dont understand how much they mean to me! lately i havent been writing as much as i used to but reading peoples comments really encourage me to write more - and thats what your comments have done!
Anyway omg this was ur first poem! i cant even remember my first poem, this is my second account on the site coz my other one got suspended =s i had all my first poems on that one.. but now with this account i only put a few old ones n then just started fresh pretty much. l0l anyway sorry for bragging. this was really sad hun.. i remember wht its like to have ur heart broken.. but these days is a totally different story l0l =p anyay very touching iece and i loved its structure. =) anyway better stop now =p gota keep reading ;o) xx

Babesy, perfect job! I loved it! And I can relate soooo much! I loveeee it!
xoxo

I've never read this one Gemma, and I'm having to really go back to find poems I've never read. Though your flow is off, it's sooo good! I really liked the repetitve first line and it was a VERY good first poem on here.
Charisma*
Comment #1

That's very good for a first poem.
And it makes sense, too.
How old were you when you wrote it?
-Animus

Well for this to be your first poem it is good. 5/5 and iknow how you feel but its life and we got to move on

Lol gem, again just a beautiful poem gem, you know how to write amazingly even from the very beginning!!!!

---tara

That is such an awsome poem u r way 2 modest lol

That was a great poem.
From the beginning till the end.
Don't have an experience with this situation,,
Hope you didn't fall for him again so he could break your heart again.
I wonder, did you have found a way not to fall in love again with such person?.. Think it would be a handy tip for everyone..
Anyway, it's a great poem, and this was your very first one?.. just great.
Take care