by Robert Apr 25, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
Knock, Knock came a sound from my door, |
Very long but an attention grabber. It had very few mistakes and flowed fairly well. A common topic but you seemed to add a personal touch to it. make the needed corrections and you will have another masterpiece. 5/5 |
Wonderful poems.. very descriptive and filled with great emotion.. however if i may suggest to help the flow of the poem by adding more of a structure |
by Vanessa
A few spelling errors, and a few typos, but otherwise, A really chilling write, Descriptive word choice, great flow, deep, emtions, man this one really it one of your best. I have to say so far it is my favorite. I think in this case punction would create a perfect poem. I really enjoy reading your work, it is diffrent, and so intresting, usually holds agreat moral to some chilling story. 5/5 |
I love your writing, but this seems like a cliche topic to me. |
by otto
I couldn't really follow it, the flow is not flowy, different chose of words for more detai, the idea of the poem was good, do you write short stories? |