wow, I'm amazed. 6/5 powerful. can't wait to read more.

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Sweet Hon,... need to proff read a little but great.

very well done!! keep up da good work!!

Wow you can tell you have been writing for sometime. I haven't been writing all that long! That was an amazing piece of work! I think you would be able to write a great book and not just poetry! Take Care! Brooke

I couldn't really follow it, the flow is not flowy, different chose of words for more detai, the idea of the poem was good, do you write short stories?

I love your writing, but this seems like a cliche topic to me.
The flow isn't too bad in here, though. Hm. Even though it's cliche, it's beautifully written, so I'll give you a four. Sorry.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

A few spelling errors, and a few typos, but otherwise, A really chilling write, Descriptive word choice, great flow, deep, emtions, man this one really it one of your best. I have to say so far it is my favorite. I think in this case punction would create a perfect poem. I really enjoy reading your work, it is diffrent, and so intresting, usually holds agreat moral to some chilling story. 5/5

Wonderful poems.. very descriptive and filled with great emotion.. however if i may suggest to help the flow of the poem by adding more of a structure

Very long but an attention grabber. It had very few mistakes and flowed fairly well. A common topic but you seemed to add a personal touch to it. make the needed corrections and you will have another masterpiece. 5/5