i loved it. i think its weakest point is the end tho. if you could fix that up itd be super-awesome. 5/5.

Good poem, I think it would make good song lyrics although maybe the last line could do with abit of work. Keep it up xxx

i like it a lot! keep writing! 5/5

I like your poem i think it can reaaly make people cry if their soppy and all that if u want email me at

FILTHYBOYME@MSN.COM