I totally get what you're saying here, and far be it from me to say what a poem should and shouldn't be. But when i started reading this poem, i was suprised it didn't rhyme at all...like not once....if i were to offer you any advice to improve the piece...given that it's pretty standard in every other regard..it would be to make it rhyme as sweetly as you can.

regards.

I actually really like this. A lot. That's all I can say, because if I get started on it, all the positive things will never end. (p.s. rhyming is way too overated. Keep it just the way it is. You wrote it from the heart, so keep it that way. Besides, you can lose the meaning in trying to make it rhyme. Personally, I can't write non-rhyming poems, so you having that ability is a step ahead of me.)
Luv always, KT