I think I liked this one the best . It gave a clear picture of what you were trying to express. I agree with the a little choppy in places but practice makes perfect .Great poem none the less. Keep it up

OMG OMG OMG THIS WAS SO FREAKING SAD!! 5/5

Depressing... but well written yet again

Aww this is really sad...:( but its good...5/5 good job
Becky
xoxo

This is SOOO good ecspecially cause it never happenened to you it was worded so well and everything was just good about this poem

There were a couple of stanza that I was epsecially interested in:

"I wanted to wait until I was married,
And he said he could wait;
Would he still have raped me,
If he knew his daughter's fate?

I know it was wrong,
To not even let you live,
To ever see
What this Earth has to give.

Every time I thought about you,
I thought of him,
Of what he had done,
And how you were the result of his sin.

I am sorry, my dear child,
This guilt is hard to fight,
I am so sorry that you were the one,
The child that never seen the light."

These were my favourite stanzas. =)

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Great job, the message was clear and I loved it. 5/5, I love your writing :) I'm against abortion too, and the whole idea about being raped scares me...
I'll read two more of your poems but I think that's all I have time for.
Love,
Niki

I like the poem, it's great that you can also write poems that aren't exactly about you or your feelings.

I find it interesting that you wrote about something against your beliefs and so well too. I really applaud your efforts for taking on this type of subject, especially under the circumstances of “making it up.” I know people who have been through the same and I think you did well to put their feelings forward. You have a couple forced rhymes in here, but other than that, good job. Keep it up.

Great poem i really like it keep up the good work.
Emma 5/5

Such a sad poem :(
hope things are ok
good poem though!

What an extremel sad poem :'(
so touching and well written
well done
xoxoxox
~*MaRy*~

Very well expressed. Very sad indeed. It reminds me of everyday happenings. I was also raped and molested, but at a young age of 9 until almost 12. It's very difficult, but I managed through.

((((Big Hugs))))

Michelle

Hey such a sad poem!
i nearly cried!
i especially love this stanza;
I am sorry, my dear child,
This guilt is hard to fight,
I am so sorry that you were the one,
The child that never seen the light.
well done!
love mel