by Carmen Apr 27, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
cyber love
Some people say, |
by David Munoz
Really the same as your other poem. You don't have to make it longer, just fully expand your thinking to the possiblilities. Pretty good poem |
by LadyPearl
Nice topic and well-chosen message. But, work on the flow and try adding more imagery |
by Michelle
Very well expressed. I hope you find that special someone in your life to help you find your true happiness within your self. |
by Darien
I've felt that way before. hmm |
The structure was creative, i enjoyed reading it, but i have to say that i found it hard flow through the whole thing. I have to agree with oddyball that the "body's frame" line doesnt really fit. other then that a creative write. |