Don't get me wrong I like your work but it does need alot of seasoning. Writing is a craft that takes time and commitment, you can't find your voice over night beleive me I have tried. With every work you will see yourself getting better. This is not a 50 yard dash it's a marithon. The longer your willing to work with it. The better you are. I know this from exp. I written since I was 14 and I am now 35. You say you like my work alot, Thanks I am glad. Never think of yourself as not good. No matter what anyone says or does. Beleive in yourself and try your hardest. Thats when great things come. Remember Falure is just another step on the stair way to success. To be the best you got to push until it pushes back and when it does push harder. Never give up never stop until you die. Even with your last breath go farther because you may just succeed. I hope this helps you. I gave you a five on this because you painted me a picture of what you wanted to say. You conveyed your message in a way that intresting thats a good thing, and it flowed nicely!!! Never give up and never lose heart. Take care and I know your best work is still to come. ;)...

wow carmen, that was really good, and really sad, you have a talent, i just added you to my favourites, keep it up

Luv Always
*Lucy*

really good, try not 2 give up, it will someday turn out ok, x)

very good Carmen! I voted a 5.. *****
Please check out my new poem "Me VS. The Razor Blade" it would mean so much to me.. thanks a lot.. hugs

Robert is right... try and.. hmm... try and flow a little better. You have a lot of good thoughts, and good ryhmes, but they feel forced, and it's hard to flow. I know that you will get better over time, just keep it up! 4/5

The poem was good overall, but some of your rhymes sound forced. Like you couldn't think of another rhyme and just stuck it there. Keep writing and you'll get better. And don't feel bad, one day you'll see that we were helping you.

-Ice

I liked this, but theres something wrong, that i havent really found yet. Otherwise it's pretty good. Keep Writing!!

Luv Alwayz,
Katie Schettler

Nice poem.

Yet again you did very good!! you did great expressing your feelings! 5/5 by far!

Aww I really like this poem a lot. It is terrific! 5!!

Love much,
Tiff

very very insightful. If it's any consolation to you...it does get better. I promise!

You have a real talent i loved your poem!

This poem reminds me so much of myself when i was your age.. it was very good... i liked it a lot 5/5

ttyl
Maddy

i wasn't sure about this one at first but I really enjoyed how you tied it all together at the end. nice job!

good write. Its hard writing all these feelings down, I'm sure. But don't give up. I like how you blended different situations into the poem.

Take care,
Renee

awww that is soo sad, but still i really think you have agreat poem writing talent, keep it up hun!!!

Lucy***

great job.it's sad when people give up though, i don't know how strong you relate to your poems but i still hope you have hope and strangth.

~PLP~ lil slam~

liked this one too. was great keep up the good work.

i liked it. so many feelings all in one. loved it.

Emma

I can really relate to this poem. I loved your rhyming technique. I think the poem flowed very nicely. Your an awesome writer. Keep it up. xX