Rachel, I can imagine how your were feeling while this was going on, due to the exageration of poetic elements and imagery in your charismatic poem. Well done....
~Hina

Great poem hun! This was so powerful and beautiful! Thanx for the comments on my poems. They really helped me.
love alwayz....
Haily
XOXOXOXO

The flow was real bad on this one you leaped from one idea to another so fast that it was hard to keepo up. Some of the stuff had a good flow but it was too small and little to really enjoy. All and all it seemed like a dear John Letter that shot from idea to idea. I seen you do better, shorten this one up you got alot of redundant words that could be omitted but its always a work in progress...

5/5!!1! very well-written!!

wow...amazing..very good ..5/5 keep it up

shannon

WOW... i am so jealous.. i just started getting back into poetry recently, but i dont actually know any rhyming scemes, or formats on how a proper poem should be.. so i basically just write how i feel and try to make it rhyme , or free verse... so i was wondering if u could help me there.. your a great poet and i was wondering if u could tell me the rhyme sceme you used in this one... i like how it flows so well.... i just wish i was that good.... your truly brilliant when it comes to poetry! keep it up