by Robert Apr 28, 2005
category :
Life, society /
other
Did I do everything right, what did I leave out, |
by Jaymes Haze
I'm going to have to say that this is supposedly an attempt to show someone's plight in trying to show someone, probably important to them, the way to get through life. |
by sweet escape
Once again you capture the meaning you wish to display and your paint it for everybody to see. the only thing i have to say is that he diffrent lenghts of the stanzas throws off the flow a little but it was great and i give it a 5. |
Hmm i never seen a poem that hits upon being a parent quite this way, i also like the way you chose to express yourself with your imagination, great work hope to see more - |
by she
This is really sweet,shows youre love for them |
Real good vocab in this one again you really choose you words carfully and i like that xxx alex xxx |