wow that was one of the best poems i have read....so much emotion i loved it 5/5
-*tears*
read sum of my poems if ya have the time

love the poem, possibably my favorite that you have made. you are such a strong and wonderful writer!

~PLP~ lil slam~

The content of the poem was great, but i think it needs some more work. If you changed the rhyme scheme to something else more interesting (not just abab or something like that) it would help...Or if each paragraph didn't sound so similar. But, I did enjoy this poem a lot. Keep writing,
Satuxxa