i saw a one. voted... if ur going to do that please explain why!!

not your best i voted 3..

oh the reason i voted 3 was because it didnt flow that easy and was hard to read...with some work it could be made into a masterpeice like alot of your work...maybe take each lonliness(cant spell to tired) and put it into a stanza? lonliness is ......
because...
so on so on....x)