If you cannot

by Hannah Hannah Martin   May 5, 2005


If you cannot see the scrapes on my face
I find you blind
and a big disgrace

If you cannot smell the whisky on my shirt
I find you smelless
and as low as dirt

If you cannot see my bloodshot eyes
I find you stupid
And can't tell truth from lies

If you cannot feel my shaking legs
I find you crazy
And doesn't beg

Wish I could leave my life
And come back without any strife
But that can't be possible
I'm way to feable

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  • 19 years ago

    by Renee

    really dark, mysterious. are you trying to get someone to see you? like a cry for help? I dunno what exactly your trying to say, maybe you can enlighten me? well, it sounded like a great poem. though i dont know the meaning, it seems to flow and the words are very descriptive.

    Take Care,
    Renee

  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie84

    WELCOME TO THE CLUB!!!!! :)

    I think maybe the rhyme is a little forced. Reading Leg/Beg just seemed really forced as it doesn't make much sense. I think the idea of this poem is really cool. A cry for help and opening up someone's eyes to your pain. Good thought.

    A little change could make a world of difference in this piece.

    Take Care... :)

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