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I think maybe the rhyme is a little forced. Reading Leg/Beg just seemed really forced as it doesn't make much sense. I think the idea of this poem is really cool. A cry for help and opening up someone's eyes to your pain. Good thought.

A little change could make a world of difference in this piece.

Take Care... :)

really dark, mysterious. are you trying to get someone to see you? like a cry for help? I dunno what exactly your trying to say, maybe you can enlighten me? well, it sounded like a great poem. though i dont know the meaning, it seems to flow and the words are very descriptive.

Take Care,
Renee