These Hands

by Pianist   May 6, 2005


These hands I see are long and thin
Soft yet firm with silken skin
Been to places nationwide
Tightly clasped a mountainside.
Found a diamond in the sky
Played a quiet lullaby
Touched a thousand gleaming jewels
Hit their share of screaming fools
Felt a lonely heart break slow
Held and shot dear cupid's bow
Stroked a soul till it awaked
Clenched a fist until it ached
Broke a bone or two before
Pulled a string and stopped a war
But as I see these hands benign
I don't believe these hands are mine

Copyright © 2005 Nobody

-Countless, countless stories of "These Hands."

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  • 18 years ago

    by noone

    I will do that i love to learn considering im only in sixth grade im so curious i love to write and learn i will definatly go out and buy a thesaurus

  • 18 years ago

    by Daenerys Stormborn

    Ok, this is a pretty good poem. But it's somewhat contradictory. I'd expect hands that stopped a war, been nationwide, etc...to be rough and worn. Not silken. I don't really like that idea. The word "stroked" seems out of place as well. Too soft sounding

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Stroked a soul till it awaked
    ((But I Loved this line.. It was.. perfect.))
    Stroked a soul till it awaked
    Clenched a fist until it ached
    ((Lost rhyme here.))

    I very much enjoyed this poem. It was interesting to read.. Though I have no idea what 'These Hands' are... Perhaps you could explain it to me? Anyways, may I make a suggestion: Use punctuation. You have unpeckable flow, but with punctuation your poems will be flawless. =]

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by kori

    Really nice flow. awesome job, im adding you to my favorites.

  • 19 years ago

    by No Motiv?

    "pulled a string and stopped a war" -ingenious.

    Another reason why you're on my favorites list.

    5/5.

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