You meant, fallen in the last line in which I liked the last couplet but as you said, the poem's just basically a vent....but not too bad. 4/5

Love,
Heather.

This really wasn't that bad...You just need to refine it some(check spelling, capitalization, word choice etc) and it would be pretty good. It was kinda dark and sadistic and I kinda liked it. Sounds kinda Stephen Kingish or Edgar Allan Poe-ish. Good Job.
Bryant

You know what I didn't like about it? (*shocked face at dislikement*) Twas the fact that I was not able to look away or make noise to not hear it (if it were on screen or something)...yeah, that part...the lala's in my head didn't do a thing...anyways....

"she kicked and she had screamed.
she cried and ask for her mom" - *asked

^In my head, I automatically read "mommy" at the end of the line...it may go better with that...not sure though...may not seem realistic, but in terror who knows what she'd cry out....

"he laughed and then slices her head off
he was silent as it was require by his work" -
*required

"he still had a smirk as he let it roll from his whee barrel" - *wheel

You're not allowed to say it sucks :P Don't judge your own work...you write what you feel, that's all you need to do.

*attempts to shine light on you*

xxx

Very sad poem, it just shows how some people can be really messed up. This is a good poem you might read through it again and make sure that the words are in the tense. Other then that I see nothing wrong with this poem. 5/5