Try It pt2

by Mark Coates   May 9, 2005


I know your plans
your gonna take them away now
well i'm sorry it had to end this way
i wonder why i ever idolized you
why i treated you with respect
because your weak and your pathetic
the worst way to hurt my dad
was to stop him seeing his kids
is that why you did it
with your lover boy
you created a plan
to stop him seeing them
well everyone you ever strived to be
don't like yopu anymore
they've left you because you hurt my dad
your never gonna be honest
because you hate everyone

© Mark Coates 2005

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  • 19 years ago

    by Robert

    Look I think you got some good ideas to work with but executing them is abit hard maybe your brain runs faster then your brain. Look it happens to the best of us. This was more like a I despise you letter. It had no flow and a couple of spelling errors. Try to find different styles be creative and try to pull of a certain fomula that works for you the rest wiull come in time keep trying...

  • 19 years ago

    by Emilia

    Great poem!!! 5 stars for this one... keep it up.. please check out my poem "My dream boy dosen't exist" please comment/vote.. thanks a lot... hugs

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