Great poem!!! 5 stars for this one... keep it up.. please check out my poem "My dream boy dosen't exist" please comment/vote.. thanks a lot... hugs

Look I think you got some good ideas to work with but executing them is abit hard maybe your brain runs faster then your brain. Look it happens to the best of us. This was more like a I despise you letter. It had no flow and a couple of spelling errors. Try to find different styles be creative and try to pull of a certain fomula that works for you the rest wiull come in time keep trying...