by LostHopesCrimsonTears May 10, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
When life's so bad |
by Robert
The was a sparkle of good work there towards the end. On the up scakle your work has improved on this alot I see alot of potential but like others as well as myself you need time and a chance to find your own style but you are on the right path keep writing... |
by Dorotea©
For this kind of poem, it was way too long. I think you should shorten it, because basically you're just saying the same thing over and over again in different ways, which makes it boring. But don't worry, just keep writing, |