It really is a sweet poem and it's written very well. Like I've said before, keep up the writing. You're such a great writer!!

Great job David and very creative at that 5/5

Love,
Heather.

Oh David, this is written beautifully with so much emotion! I'm sorry you're going through such a rough time! I hope she comes around, cause your a great guy....you deserve happiness! Now that I've had my say, these were my favorite parts:

"You are the source of so much joy and of pain
The sun is shining but I’m drowning in the rain"

and

"If you’d just wait a moment and take hold of my hand
I’d give you the moon, the stars and all that I am"

Keep your head up~Holly

Now that I've read it again, I have to add...your opening stanza is brilliant! I really can't pick a favorite part, I love the entire poem....Holly