Not the best in the world but what i really licked (witch isnt in that many other poems) is that it has a really important message.

~(Maby) TTYL

This flowed pretty good until you hit the ending then it sunk like a lead washer what happend. Well nice attempt. If you get the time will you comment and vote on any of my featured work thanks.

your scratching the surface and not going deeper into your work let me understand you show me how to see this subject in your lines give me reasons why you feel this way then your on your way to really making this poem stand out do you understand?

hey sorry, its been a while since i have been on. ive been so super busy. i have a new lil brother. im so happy. i dont think ive slept for like 4 days. haha. its so awsome. he is small and cute. its freakin great. im so excited. well i hope to hear from you again. Much Love

Nick

i really like this poem very much, hope your aite.

I love it short and sweet good job