Planet

by Brooke Thompson   May 16, 2005


Plains of golden greenery as far as the eye can see
Lakes and rivers as clear as the deep blue sky
Air that is purely fresh
New life all around you
Every creature balanced
This is true paradise

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  • 19 years ago

    by Nici

    I agree with Brooke on this one. You could look into developing your poems into longer pieces of descriptive writing. This may add value to the words and allow you to explore more writing styles.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 19 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    Beautiful! The only advice I have for you is to maybe take your poems a bit further. Also try and keep your lines more even and maybe even break the poem into stanzas! That's just my opinion! Keep posting! You have very good ideas! ~Brooke~

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