by Corrie May 18, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Curled up and shaking in the corner |
by VampyraKiâ€
That was very good nice job |
by paulina.♥
It's a good poem, but I think you used "hand" and "stand" too much in the middle. Maybe later on, you'll get inspired again and you'll make it even better. But remember, it's already quite good. Keep writing, dear. |
I know how that goes, writing poems that dont relate one bit, great job! especially for a guy who hasn't had to go through with it. |
by David Paul
Okay. First of all I don't think you need to use same word rhymes. It takes away uniqueness and creativity when you confine yourself to using the same words. Second your stanzas arn't very even so it kind of makes it hard to read and it throws of a balance so we don't really get your whole idea. 4/5 |
by Bredada
I LLOVE THIS POEM UNFORTUNATELY IVE BEEN THROUGH THIS WHEN I WAS YOUNGER IM SO GLAD MY DADS GONE NOW |