Very sad poem! Lots of emotions shown in this one! I noticed a few spelling and gramar errors. Other than that well done! Take Care! Brooke~

Wasn't a bad poem, but I usually find poems split into stanzas, easily to read and flow better, know what I mean?

I'm sorry, but I didn`t like this one at all...

It seems as if some points are there in order to make the whole thing rhyme.

You should try to use more colourful language, and avoid those rhyming-clichès.

Besides, the rhyming scheme is not complete, and it doesnt really flow.

not bad, not bad at all. keep up the good work. id check your spelling that cud improve it
~Freak~

great poem.. I voted a 5!! please check out my poem "A thousand tears for dad" please comment and vote! thanks a lot.. hugs

This is an outstanding poem witha powerful message. please rate my latest post 'Zanthonie's Song' it is is the same topic great job5

Beautiful and it always made me cry! It had a great message but i agree you should split it up into Stanza's, it does make it easier to read5*

Aww Hunny, I'm so sorry u have a talent and don't stop writing!!