by Pianist May 19, 2005
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
A game or two of chess ago |
I loved that poem, good work. |
by Drew Gold
I wonder about changing "he would" to "would he"... you inverted the syntax in the prededing stanza's last line, as well.. other than that .. that's a very poignant piece. solid all around besides what i stated earlier. |
Great poem. I don't think I am wrong when I say it's truly original! But I think you may have meant "worthy" instead of worth. I could be wrong. 5/5 |
Very interesting. You read this and think of a game of chess, come to find the great moral you meant at the bottom. I love the morals at the bottom of your poem... Nicely done, as always. You're a very strong poet. |
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