The Lonely Feather

by Biscuit   May 23, 2005


Discarded, abandoned
The lonely feather
fluttered
In the air
supported
By the wind,
it danced
A pitiful, solitary pirouette

Neglected, deserted
The lonely feather
landed
In the water
carried
By the current,
it pierced
The smooth surface of the stream

Tousled, torn
The lonely feather
settled
On the ground
adopted
By the earth,
it sang
A mournful melody

A careless breeze
The lonely feather
cast
Into the fire
burning
In the blazing flames,
it cried
Tears of sorrow and regret

The despairing ashes of
The lonely feather
scattered
Into the skies

(age 15)

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  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    At age 15 and you wrote this! you are born a writter ;)

    keep it up
    i loved it alot

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Biscut --
    Again, another good poem. I think the theme was kind of vague, and I couldn`t really grasp your intent. But the descriptions, deatail, and imagery put into it was great! The flow kind of knoked me off a bit, as it`s not steady, but it still worked out well. Good job.

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    Is the feather meant to represent a person? Its lovely imagery, and a novel idea...your poems are more original than most
    :)
    I love the ending too
    WD

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Great imagry and description in this peice, good flow too. if the feather meant to be simbolic of a person or life btw? well i took it to be anyway and found it vey easy to think of in such a way. the content is clear and well expressed and the peices structure very well thought out.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by David Munoz

    Wow.... I really like this one. You are very talented 5/5

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