It is good! I really liked it, and that way it wasn't forced to rhyme. One thing... the line 'And dry to sink me under again.' is it meant to be 'try'? Keep it up xxx

AAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWW!!! ^.^ That's so SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET!!!!! Great work, Shawdy! I can so relate...this reminds me of me and my boy. PEACE!!!

I liked it :) I thought it was pretty good:) Keep up the awesome work. tata

Eden

lol, this is actually really gd xxxxxxxx

I thought this was fabulous! tHIS IS truly a great piece... I love the original format and scheme. Awesome job!
Car