"With all my heart he took the sorrow and my depression
away he told me he loves me."

It was quite hard to understand this poem, because there are run-on sentences and incomplete sentences. I'd definately suggest revising and editing this poem, it still seems sketchy.

Also, one big problem I saw was that you aren't actually saying anything very meaningful with this poem, atleast not to the reader. You repeat different variations of the words "i love you," instead of using something more original as the basis for your poem.

Work on it some more, and I'll be checking on your poems later on. Also, though this probably felt like a big bunch of critique, I'm doing this for everyone so dont' worry. :)

Dorotea