I LOVE this poem.. can I have it? lol, jk. Anyway. I really like the way this was written.. how the last line of each verse was the first in the next. Anyway, 5/5 from me... really put some strong emotions in there.
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Robin

WHOA WICKED!

suxh a great poem,
know exactly how you feel.
i think the way you wrote is was really good... like Robin said.

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as i said before when i saw it at school, i love it. its very beautiful
~Freak~

It was very interesting that you used the last line of each stanza for the next stanza's first line. That was very creative and it made the poem flow very well. Good job.

This topic, however, is really worn out. I guess I've read too many cutting poems, because i'm getting really bored of reading them but that's not your fault. It's just that there are probably thousands of poems like this all over the sight so it's hard for me to focus on this one without thinking of all the other cutting poems I've read.

I did like it though, and it's definately better than all the other cutting poems I've read.

Keep writing,
Dorotea

"Of pretendful happiness"
"pretendful" is not a word, just stick to "pretend."

The format was interesting, and since it was so captivating, the rhyming in your poem didn't really bother me, it seemed to blend in all right. I guess I do feel that the topic can seem a bit stereotypical at times, but this poem does a bit better job than most, especially by using more metaphors and symbolism than most.