Wow, this was really good. I liked how you set it up, and how it could really get you deep into it. Keep up the good work, cuase your going great.

~*~Rika~*~

I think this poem you have written must be about self harm.

I understand what you are going through as my best friend she cut herself for over 2 years, i tried to help her so much but nothing ever worked, she also tried to kill herself. this is how i know how you feel and you must try and stop, coz its hurting other people aswell, as i can see from your poem

I can feel the emotion in this and because i have gone throught this situation my self... it really tells a story really well....
The rhyming is very good and thats why i thing that the poem flows so well.... The is a very deep poem which leaves and everlasting affect on me so thankyou for the insite throught your poetry........
Til next time bye