Comments : I miss you

  • 17 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    This was a good poem, but I think you should put it into stanzas, it'd make the poem have more structure. And some lines have more than one
    subject like:

    "I was meant for you from the start but why oh why have we been forced apart?"

    You should probably put it:

    I was meant for you from the start,
    But why oh why have we been forced apart

    Do this on a couple of the lines and it would be better.