by SilentAngel May 29, 2005
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
Sitting there with all the loneness in the world |
by Robert
You have alot of images and they were done well but I think you really got lost in the description and lost the message you were trying to convey. I loved your use of words but I think you gave up alot to go for great images. Sorry to say that I think it would have been a good poem if you were to stay with the message. If you get time please look over any of my poems I would be greatful... |