What goes around will come around they all do say,
^^This is so true..The best line in this poem
The rest of the poem is good..i like the flow to specify n the rhyme scheme was really good...the idea was different but u penned it wel
Good job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Wow...powerful... I would never have thought about this at all......another unique poetic piece overflowing with deep feeling. Your poems always seem to explore the known but unasked portion of life and I love it. 5/5

Another great topic you really captured the imagination on this poem well done xxx alex xxx

"I was tried and convicted to go the hard way,
placing me on a path of a state of disarray.
Telling me I was never able to get that far,
that I could never touch my dreaming star."

^^favourite part. Wow. So much depth and intense emotions in those four small lines.

I really enjoyed this piece, I thought it was very thought provoking, and while filled with so much bitterness and rage, it was still written so beautifully.

Hmm... did someone have a rough childhood experience.
It is too true that there are a lot of people out there not fit to teach, I know....

It got to be a bit of a bore I must say, but it still was an interesting piece, seeing as I intially thought that it'd be something sweet.

To Learn perchance to dream,
^^ I don’t know why you have to capitalize it although I know you wanted to emphasize the word learn.

Please take the time to teach them there is life and lessons all around,
^^ I think it would have been better if you put comma between them and there

but know with or with out your words we can all cope.
^^ As usual I think the comma is again necessary here

You may not like us and think we can not think,
^^ The repetition of the word think made this line a bit odd

but know you never want to see us again when it is you on the brink.
What goes around will come around they all do say,
^^ Same comma was missing

It could have been better if you put them into stanzas.

I was very enthused of the idea that this poem was trying to portray. I could say it was a powerful write although you could have improved it a little hard. The ending didnt amaze me and I was expecting something more aggressive. Nevertheless, your idea was brilliant and somehow always inspiring the readers. I loved the vivid and powerful inspiration each of your poems represent. Good Job..5/5

Oh...that sounded dark...yikes. When I think of teachers I don't think of that.

I had one teacher like that last year though, so I understand where that is coming from. It's sort of sad...it frightened me, mostly because I wasn't expecting it to be so dark. But you said it all very well. I love your simple vocabulary that didn't seem all that simple when you used it. It sounded very very well written though. And there wasn't any sort of rhythm issue, that's always a plus! Overall you did great!

-mo-