With some editing, I would say not too bad, muh dear. Originality and soul is the key in writing and you've nicely displayed that in this piece. Keep up the good work and please stay in touch.

Love, Heather.

I liked it very much! but i think it was just a little to "fluffy" to you.. LOL! no im just messin with ya!it was good! *KISSES*~Corrie

This one is very lovely as well...I enjoyed it :)

What a good poets robert... u do a great job well well well thanks for sharing ur poems i like it

Really nice poem. I really liked it. It showed a lot of emotion n I can actually feel the love you have for this poem.

Great job!!!

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Too obvious rhymes always ruin the impression for me. I prefer non- rhyming poetry because just a few of poets can be original when it comes to rhymes.
Other that that, this was good read, very emotional and beautiful.

"Let our passion fuel our wanting love,
let us be together like the stars and skies above."

^^Loved those lines, such beautiful imagery and emotion.

"for seeing you happy is my one and only sight."

^^ I didn't think that line worked that well, I know you were going with the rhyme scheme, but I think it might sound better if you change that to something else.

"please tell do you love me as I do?"

^^I think that would flow better with something like:

"Please tell me, do you love me like I love you?"

There were a couple of spelling errors in this, but other than that, this was beautiful.

I loved the depth and emotion in this, and overall it was a beautiful write.

Exellent work once again nice job with the subject really nice xxx alex xxx