wow another good one

Thanks Kayt

I hope things are going well for you!

-Josiah

sadly sweet...love the title...beautiful work here.

Thank you for reading and for the comments. :)

xxx

I am glad you like it

and np Plus thanks for urs

-Josiah

My fave one of your poems so far. I like the way it unfold but still kwwps us guessing about exactly whats happened. ;-)

Thanks so muc ;)

-Josiah

that was a really good poem it touched me.. 5/5

Nice job i like it..nice job..4/5

thanks
take care
shannon

That was a good poem. I really liked it. *5/5* Keep up the good work.

Your rhyming scheme is a bit off, and in the poem, you tend to stray away from the point.

I know I do it too, but can't help but point this out to you, because if I can't help myself, I want to at least help others.

You tend to make your poems too long and the readers would probably lose interest in it before they could get to the very last period.

I'm not saying that your poems was bad, but I think you can make it better if you try.

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

Yeah I do tend to get off topic sometimes, its kinda hard for me not to get off topic:p I have been trying to get better on working on that but yeah... Some times my emotions get in the way when I write.

It's okey that you told me this, It just helps me to get better thats all:)
Thanks

-Josiah

Wow that was great!!!!! 5/5
~*Katherine*~