That was excellent! I loved it, i loved the way that it went together, just everything about it was wonderful.. But I'm sorry that your having rough times, and just trust God hunny, and know that God loves you soo much, and He doesnt want you to hurt.. kepp your head up! I'll pray for you! 5/5 *KISSES*~Corrie

I understand...my dad is the same way...heartless... GREAT JOB Keep writting

xoxo

it was confusing at first, but in the end it all clicked. I sometimes feel the same way about my dad....great job portraying it.

thank you all so much, it means a lot to me

XXX

The third line seemed a buit out of place with it's length, but the rest of the poem flowed nicely. I can sense the anger and hurt in this poem. Ending with a question is a unigue way to finish.

Keep Writing
Nici

You could feel all of your emotion as you read this poem! Great detail. I am sorry that this is happening to you! Very well written! Take Care! Brooke~