the first line is actually my heart that is speaking to the reader, the first two couplets are my heart speaking directly to you.

the crow sitting in his nest is sort of like god i suppose, there was a time when people believed that a crow was actually the thing that brought you up from heaven (yes, they made a movie about it) and they believed that it was the crow that had great insight and great wisdom.

Other then that the poem is pretty straight forward.

I hope you really liked my poem, i really hope you liked it!

Shaun, I must say I think this is one of your best pieces. With some editing, likely your best. Although, it was in high reference to me....I still feel the pity of it. You'll move on hun. 5/5

Love,
Heather.
ps...i wish you would still read my poems & stay in touch. I want to be friends with you with all of my heart.

hey shaun, i agree with heather, it's definitely one of your best =)....i'm sorry things didn't work out between you two...don't worry, you'll move on....well take care of yourself, and keep on writing *hugs* =)

-brittnay- ((5/5))

This is so good-my bad-great. It has an excellent dark undertone. Thanks for you comment as well. Sorry I took so long to reply. Keep writing.
~The Unforgiven

very very intense. 5 stars. i can almost feel like i experianced it, you were so...whats the word? ah, i cant think of a word that describes that feeling! any way, very very awesome piece of work. check mine out if you wish...

i got to sleep knowing she is with another
that is why they call me the withered lover

Reli reli well chosen words and its not forced rhyming thnk God. 5/5 Keep up the great work.

Plz comment and vote on some of mine and if u like my work add me to ur favs xx thx for ur time

Brilliant work.

"silent desperation my friend, it sooths
love is nothing to have if you lose
love is a fairy tail not yet proved.
you couldn't walk a step; not one, in my shoe.

i got to sleep knowing she is with another
that is why they call me the withered lover."

^That's my favourite part, but I loved it all...I mean every line...and much meaning in it....I admire your poetical skills....

xxx

Hey Shaun.. incredibly amazing piece.. i totally loved the rhythm throughout and also its flow.. wonderful poem.. keep it up
nouna

hey every one above is right you are amazing at writting.... keep it up your good!

Hey Dark Savior,
You don't need to ask what we think about this poem! I think you know how this work is right? its perfect! i loved this part :

"silent desperation my friend, it sooths
love is nothing to have if you lose
love is a fairy tail not yet proved.
you couldn't walk a step; not one, in my shoe"

Hey listen heads up please and write some more ! Where are you???

much Respect,
Rua Francis

i got to sleep knowing she is with another
that is why they call me the withered lover. this line is So expressive
Though it is the last line I feel it adds so much to the poem as a whole

You did awesome! nice job.

LaterZ,
BX girl*

I really like this one. I surely hope you are much happier now, I would love to read some of your new work if possible. Keep it up.

First poem on this website in about a month that made me say WOW,
Its just in its simplicity that makes it worthy of a second look a second vote a second nomination for a contest, wow. I see nothing wrong with this and probably by far your best poem.Enough said?

Great poem. The rhyming was great and so was the wording in general. The the image that it created was strong and vivid. I can't believe that so few has rated this poem. I gave it a 5/5.

Ok that was good :]
I still have to comment on some parts..don't hate me lol.

"i gave her it all that's a true fact. "
I'm not sure of what I'm gonna say but isn't this supposed to be "I gave it all to her, that's a true fact"?? [Notice the comma I posted between the two sentences..I think it should be added to make the line easier to understand.

"love is a fairy tail not yet proved. "
this line I liked so much..I think it's left a mark in my heart =]

"that is why they call me the withered lover. "
I don't know but this line could've been worded in a better way..like for example "And at the end I'm called the withered lover" or "And that is why I'm called the withered lover"
I don't mean to change in the poem..not at all..the way of expression as I see could be more beautiful, that's all

I loved the title..I gotta admit it was catchy :]
One thing left..I noticed at the end of every line you posted a dot, I think you should put in consideration that punctuations are important in poetry...Also capitalizing the first letter of the first word of each line..

Thats all I have to say
Thanks for sharing and Write on =)

This poem is beyond outstanding.
Wonderful job.

I definatly loved how you wrote this, it was really interesting.. thank you for explaining that in the first comment otherwise I probably would have been lost haha. Your ending was extremely powerful and everything in between was sad but full of emotion and feeling. I thought you did a great job with this and made it a poem some people could also relate to. PS - Great job on your Trolaan too!

Well done. :]

5/5.

Temps.

I like your writing bro. and your right it's no fun to lose the one you love but the dark ones like us learn that thoes who love the deepest get hurt the worst but thats because even when we are in love we still feel alone.
sometimes my friend thats when we are most alone...

Silent desperation my friend, it sooths
love is nothing to have if you lose
love is a fairy tail not yet proved.
you couldn't walk a step; not one, in my shoe.

*This was my favorite part. I would make shoes plural though :). Anways this part really spoke to me, because I can really relate. I feel like this sometimes and it's great to see how you express the same feelings in such a different way. I also like how you ended this piece. Very creative idea. Nice work my friend :) Nik*