Everyone to See

by Shawnda   Jun 2, 2005


On the radio these love songs play
And i think about the day
When you called me on the phone
And with that cold ass tone
You broke things off
The reasons im still waiting for
Maybe to your life i was a bore
Or maybe it was to hard for you to kiss me;
Cause you couldn't see
How much you truly meant to me
I'm getting tired with all these questions in my head;
I'm going to go to bed
And dream that you and me
Are still together for everyone to see

Please comment it means alot.

SHAWNDA

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  • 18 years ago

    by Mel

    I know what you mean with the 'love songs on the radio' when things break down. Nice poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    Nice poem. You expressed yourself nicely here. Good job:) And thanks for the comments on my poem. It really meant alot:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie84

    First I will say welcome to the club.

    I've read a couple of your poems and so far I've seen the same kind of style. Maybe it's time to switch it up and write in a different format. I wrote the same types of poems when I started writing and now I'm starting to learn new styles and trying to work on a few. I think the aa-bb thing can get a bit boring after a while. We'll get better with time....

    Also if you really love poetry and it is something you take seriously you should write out words such as "you" and "to" It's not really cool to replace them with "u" and "2" People who take poetry seriously won't bother to read your writing.

    Nice write though... :) Hope you like the club!

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