This poem was filled with emotion and I would imagine was hard to put down in words. Put you have managed it really well!

One minor point, the line that starts:
'I never said said a word'
Is the repition meant to be there? or is it a typo? Either way the repition works well as I feel it represents nervousness.

Keep Writing
Nici

Thanx Nici! for all your comments, I appreciate them! and no that was a typo.. lol, but i fixed it! : ) and you had a good point about my other poem, "the man you dreamed up foe me" I changed that too, honestly i've never written before so i dont even know what a stanza is! lol! but thanx again! *KISSES*~Corrie

THEY SAY THE THIRD IS A CHARM ONCE A PLAYA ALWAYS A PLAYA RETURNING TO HIS ARMS IS LETTIN HIM HE CAN LEAVE YOU WHENEVA HE PLEASES N HAVE U BACK WHEN EVA HE PLEASES PLEASE DONT FALL FOR HIM IVE BEEN THROUGH THIS BEFORE IS PAINFUL LUST NOT LOVE

That was so emotional. I loved it. xxx