Comments : Crazy

  • 19 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    Once again, I'll agree with Nada. Let your emotions out and sont focuse on rhyming. It was ok though for your first poem...
    Love always,
    Haily
    xoxoxoxox

  • 19 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    all advice from before :) good start x)

  • 19 years ago

    by Nici

    Instead of forcing rhymes, maybe try writing a free verse no-rhyming piece, it may prove to be more your style.

    Keep Writing
    Nici

  • 19 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    Nice try. Keep it up:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Naima

    Thanx everyone thank you. I will continue to improve my work. I know that you can't always succeed sometimes you have to fall and scrape your knees, than get back up again. So this only drives me to create better work.

    Naima

  • 19 years ago

    by Adam Murphy

    I liked this poem..i know all about the pressure you speak of :P

  • 19 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    Feels a bit sporadic in places but still well done.

  • 19 years ago

    by Naima

    ok, well I still like it. I really needed to just start off wherever I landed was a mystery...This is my first on the site so yeah, I love it all the same....