Once again, I'll agree with Nada. Let your emotions out and sont focuse on rhyming. It was ok though for your first poem... |
by ASPHYXIATED
all advice from before :) good start x) |
by Nici
Instead of forcing rhymes, maybe try writing a free verse no-rhyming piece, it may prove to be more your style. |
by Amanda Bee
Nice try. Keep it up:) |
by Naima
Thanx everyone thank you. I will continue to improve my work. I know that you can't always succeed sometimes you have to fall and scrape your knees, than get back up again. So this only drives me to create better work. |
by Adam Murphy
I liked this poem..i know all about the pressure you speak of :P |
by Jason Meres
Feels a bit sporadic in places but still well done. |
by Naima
ok, well I still like it. I really needed to just start off wherever I landed was a mystery...This is my first on the site so yeah, I love it all the same.... |