I loved this!! You did an excelnt job! you did good rhyming and making it work out! 5/5!

oh, I really loved this one. it has a good flow to it. the choice of words
is great. keep it up. you're really talented. much love, Marjan

Hey i really like your poem, and its soo true! i also liked how well it flowed and how much emotion it portrayed throughout... the only thing that wasnt quite right, was the line
"Uncontrollable feelings are taking over you.
While you should be screaming joyfully but grieve is what you do."

the last line is too long, so it doesnt sound like it flows.... just that though.. but keep up the good work it was great! please comment on my poems