by Naima Jun 4, 2005
category :
Life, society /
about society
I love you I need you |
by Naima
ok, thanx for eveyones honest feedback! |
good poem. |
by Naima
Thank you everyone for your comments this really helps I will take it a use it constructively!!! Thankx |
by Nici
Not much more to add to the other comments you have recieved on this poem. Some lines are again to long whilst others seem to short, which affects the flow and overall effect. |
by ASPHYXIATED
i agree with nada, maybe some rhyming and like i said before the length of lines and maybe stanzas for the flow...stanzas arnt that important but could help :) |