The Road of My Mind

I liked the kind of philosophical tone to this poem. I liked the idea of the path of your mind being made by choices and it’s not something you can foresee. I liked your choice of words, in the most of the poem and how you moved on to another important message with each stanza. You said just enough to give the reader an idea, but not enough to be definite, almost letting the readers think for themselves about the rest.

My only suggestions are with the first stanza you describe the road as dark. Then go on to say it has hills and valleys with lush forests. These contradict either other and hinder the effects you were wanting.
In the second stanza, although this is just personal, I find using the same word at the end of two connecting lines somewhat sloppy. Maybe if your re worded one ending word, this would sound better. However these suggestions are up to you, it is your poem.

Good job, over all I enjoyed the poem. Keep writing.

great poem AJ. I loved it specially the way you ended it. keep it up.
wish you the best,
marjan

This is weird I was just starting a poem so similar to yours I never finished it! Great idea lOl this poem is so true it's how I feel a lot of the times! Very well done! Take Care! Brooke~

Good concept and its true because life is one big road a good write!

take care

i like the idea of this poem and how u realted life to the road your travelling! good write would have loved it to go on for longer but still great!
xxxLoUxxx