so another masterpiece that worked out of my sweat covered head.

I really enjoyed some of the wording you used, especially in the end of the poem. I also thought it was good that this poem isn't very long yet what you want to say comes out clearly without having to use many fancy words. Great job. I have one suggestion though. The flow needs more work and so do the rhymes. Some parts were definitly forced with the rhymes. Dividing the poem up into stanzas might also help. Overall, I enjoyed this poem. For a love poem I thought it was unique and well written.
Dorotea