by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex Jun 7, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
The blade against my wrist, |
by Robie Lincer
This is another nice poem! you really know how to write dark poems! you are good at it! |
I dont think this is your best work.. the story was intriguing(sp?) but the overall poem was not that great, manythings were repeated. also the random line lengths and different sized stanzas caused me to get annoyed, it didnt flow as well as it could, with some minor touch ups, -using synonyms to replace overused words or words that cause the lines to be too long(or short) could really improve it. |
Not bad ...not bad at all.....lol |
I liked the way this went from being sad to hopeful. I loved the first half it was brilliantly written but I felt the poem lost it's way a little half way through. |
Wow! Thats all I can say.......good job on this one! Im speechless!!! |