Slicing is like kissing death!

Great poem ^_^

awesome poem...

-Maisha

I think this the best poem of yours. Very nice.

this has a little different spin on it... but thats cool.. keep up the good work
take care of you
amanda

Wow! Thats all I can say.......good job on this one! Im speechless!!!

I liked the way this went from being sad to hopeful. I loved the first half it was brilliantly written but I felt the poem lost it's way a little half way through.
Great job though.

Not bad ...not bad at all.....lol

I dont think this is your best work.. the story was intriguing(sp?) but the overall poem was not that great, manythings were repeated. also the random line lengths and different sized stanzas caused me to get annoyed, it didnt flow as well as it could, with some minor touch ups, -using synonyms to replace overused words or words that cause the lines to be too long(or short) could really improve it.

4/5

*tinyheart*

This is another nice poem! you really know how to write dark poems! you are good at it!

Keep it up!