I pray
For happiness-
Only to find
Fate never had
Happiness in mind

I love that line.

This was very good...Excellent wording as well.! xxx

That was a very excellent poem! 5!!! It flowed really nicely! <3

This was an intresting poem to say the least its flow was a bit choppy but the message was really good. The images you gave were done very well. All and all I think it was a very well done poem. I gave it a 5

Very nice. Lovely flow. Great job I love your poem.

loved it! i really liked your wording for everything and i could relate to it. very nice flow. keep up the excellent work, youre very talented!

~*LorienElf*~

I love it, u are a great writer, so dont ever give it up, 5/5 once again!

A lot of the comments state how sad etc this poem was. I do see where it was sad. Am I crazy to say that I found it very tranquil? Maybe it was the flow, or the general wording. I very much enjoyed it.

I like this poem alot, very deep and emotional, I pictured the poem.... My fave line was the same as Jasons....Keep up the good work

Great peice, short but definitive, the vocabulary and rhythm was pefect in this poem. Kind regards from Kane

another great poem good job.

My grip slips,
Seems like the world
Has forgotten me.
Without my presence,
The world is settling.

I love that line so much. its so touching, and i know exactly what its like to feel that way. I loved this poem very much, just like the others i have read. please dont forget to check out my featured poems.

i like this poem, have a nice flow, way to go you get a *5*

I loved the first paragraph, so strong and flowing...the rest went nicely as well, don't fear, but the first just stuck out above the rest.

DarkSuicide

Love this one! 5/5 thx for r/c on my poems